Peer Review Comments

For Amber:

The introduction is clear but I am confused by the part about how they come together. Could you cite some examples? Also, I would like to know more about the fire and what it symbolizes. How do they die when they first meet? I would also like to know whether the green gem was always the same. In the Reincarnation paragraph, explain how it is actually encouraged.

For Jay:
For your introduction,I think that you should at least put a brief summary in what is the book is about. In some parts, I feel that it is sort of redundant and those parts could be taken out. You also need evidence (put some quotes). You have many short paragraphs, I believe that some of them could be combined and some are of similar ideas and commentary. I think you also need to explain more on theme. It is not clear to me.

For Alex:
In the introduction, there were some parts of it that were wrong. I insist that you read over your introduction. I agree with Jasiu where you needed more evidence. I like some of your quotes but the commentary is sometimes repetitive of the quote. Put of more of your opinions in there if you would like. I would also like to comment that sometimes, the paragraph might be distracted or it goes off topic.